His big head is long and oval like the shape of an egg.
The moon is glittering like the stars glimmering at night.
The tower has chipped bricks and is very dangerous.
By Liam
By Liam
This is the writing blog of Team Endeavour - a group of 8 - 10 year olds at Springston School. The posts might not be perfect when they first go on the blog but with your comments and as we improve our editing - there should be a huge improvement.
To Liam,
ReplyDeleteWe really like how you used adjectives. And we think you could use a question at the end. Do you like writing.
By Jack,s and Lucy
Nice work Liam I like your simillie.
ReplyDeleteMaybe next time you could put an alliteration like silent sleepy shadows.
And what does he sound like when he speaks?
By Phelix and Alfonso.
Liam,
ReplyDeletewe like the how you have used lots of adjectives like curling, glimmering and glittering. We like your simile too ... oval like the shape of an egg.
We can see that you used he, his or the to start your sentences. Try to use use different starts.
By Zac & Jack B Room 6
Liam, I am wondering why you said the tower was so dangerous. Could you explain that in your writing?
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