This is the writing blog of Team Endeavour - a group of 8 - 10 year olds at Springston School.
The posts might not be perfect when they first go on the blog but with your comments and as we improve our editing - there should be a huge improvement.
To Jess,We like the way you said what you thought it was. You could write a question at the end. Do you like writing?By Lucy and Jack,s
Jess, good work Jess I like the way you did a simile, The flipper like feetmake him look like a slinky seal.You could improve by adding some more sentences and making them shorter. By Liam and Sam
Jess,We like how you said he was depressed. We think you should wright the shadows name instead he.From Chloe & Maggie Room6
To Jess,We really liked the way you used the adjectives shimmering for the moon and said he was emerging from the clouds, we got stuck in the first big sentience could you make it smaller?From Josh and Tate
Wow good effort Jess I read it to my sister she said it makes me feel like i was there.Daniella and charlotte b
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